My Pokemon Story chapter 1

this is my first chapter of my pokemon story I hope you like it

There once was a kid named Maxwell whose 10th birthday was today. The Bralou region was home to species of Pokemon from around the world. Pine who was a pokemon professor was waiting for Maxwell. When Maxwell got to the lab he saw that his best friend Will was there. They became best friends in first grade because they had their birthdays on the same date. Pine showed up and asked why he was early. After looking at his poketech watch it said it was 10:00. “It’s right now 10 and you said to be here at this time” said Maxwell. “Well someone didn’t move there watch back an hour” said Will. Right now it’s 9:00 time switched last night you need to remember that later on. Then Will said, "if both of us are here early can we get our Pokemon now. Then Pine said in a happy voice, "You were the earliest trainers that ever came it will be a punishment if you wait any longer."
Reaching for one pokeball at a time Pine pulls out the first pokeball and says, “This first one is Mareep it’s a electric wool pokemon you can get paralyzed by touching its wool.” “This is my favorite one” says Prof. Pine then Prof. Pine throws out Houndour. Houndour it’s a dog that usually travels with its pack. This is a ball of joy and Prof. Pine reaches in his bag and says, “Hey where Spheal it usually gets out of the pokeball but it never runs away.” In panic Prof. Pine says, “Maxwell and Will take Mareep and go look for spheal and I’ll take Houndour.” Maxwell and Will straight went to the beach to see if Spheal was there. They searched the lighthouse and the ocean but no sign of Spheal. Prof. Pine’s luck was no different either while in the forest he ran into Pidgey and Winguell he took them out but Houndour got hurt a lot so he went back to the lab. Back at the beach Maxwell and Will saw pokefood and thought they could use that to capture Spheal. They got a few pieces (because the food wasn’t there’s). At 9:30 they saw a Spheal and used Mareep to paralyze it. Then they finally rolled it back to Prof. Pine. After eating their lunch they choose their Pokemon.
Will decided to pick Mareep because electric types were his favorite. Maxwell had a hard time to choose a pokemon. His secret was that he didn’t like pokemon much but liked to travel. He thought Spheal liked to travel but he can wander away and Houndour had a bit of a temper so his chose was Spheal, but before he said Spheal a pokemon jumped through the window and hid behind Maxwell. It looked beaten so Prof. Pine put it straight to the healing machiene. Then a trainer came in and said, “Did a pokemon come through her I still need to beat it for being so weak and went on his way. After being charged the pokemon seemed to like Maxwell and Maxwell liked it. He thought he maybe like pokemon after all. Pine said, “Maxwell this Pokemon seems to like you would you want it as your partner. Then Maxwell shook his head for yes. So Maxwell got his first Pokemon and it was a Magby.

Grammar needs to be fixed...

“Well someone didn’t move there watch back an hour” said Will. Right now it’s 11:00 time switched last night you need to remember that later on."

Ummm, wouldn't that make it 9:00? I was very lost reading this

very nice story torterra, well done

jd896 wrote:Grammar needs to be fixed...

“Well someone didn’t move there watch back an hour” said Will. Right now it’s 11:00 time switched last night you need to remember that later on."

Ummm, wouldn't that make it 9:00? I was very lost reading this

I thought about it to but it still couldn't make sense to me
Redoing that part: Done

Ok, well, if someone talks, start a new line like this:

Ash and company were heading down Route 5.
Ash: I'm hungry Brock, when's lunch? (Just using example)

Well, the story has a good idea though, so I'll keep a watchful eye on this.

ill do it in the next one but thanks for the tip

Don't listen to JD the " is the profesional way to have somebody talk in a story. Its your decision though.


Nice story. Shouldn't there be new Pokemon in a different region though?

I would of but it was hard enough to figure out the prof. name and the region

prof barney.... *tilts head in shame*

Be quiet infern, I have more writing experience than YOU! XD Even your sister does! XDDDDDD

Would Prof. Pine work for you

judging that other professors are based of trees, oak, elm etc. prof. pine could work

Or Profesor Maple XD.

or Redwood XD

but profsseor rowan

that isnt a tree

Is Burch a tree?

BIRCH and yes, it is.

Maybe Rowan is a tree that we don't know of.

yea rowan is a tree

what about cypress, hazelnut or chestnut

I think Profesor Maple is a good name.

I think Maple would be better for a girl professor